Essay comments

After reading my comments to my essay, i feel like i have come a long way from the time of my last one.  First, I am happy with the drastic change in the amount of surface errors.  In terms of the idea, i feel like I made a strong effort to be original, while including large idea into the mix of my essay.  On one final note, i think one thing i need to do next time is have someone else proof-read my essay.  While i did print it out this time, i did not have someone else read it.  This is something that may have changed the couple small surface errors i did have.